Why are dreams so deceiving?
I kept dreaming while everything trembled before me
The storm of emptiness prevailed as she left without any regret
Killed all emotions and turned me into a lifeless silhouette
Lost in the darkest of any day with my soul betrayed
I stood in disbelief while my friends began to fade
Sudden unforeseen melancholy approached in disguise
Delirious from the narcotics I kept smiling at my own demise
Every day is an endless array of flashbacks aired
Paranoid I remain, haunted by the memories we shared
Losing all hope, voices of regrets started echoing
Our dying love, I couldn’t save
Our dying friendship, I couldn’t value
Life spent in delusions now ceased to seem worth living
Miserable years spent thinking death was what I craved
Now that I feel death is here
I realise, all I wanted was to be saved
As time passed by, my mind proved to be my worst enemy
Every song brings life to a million dead memories
I’m left so lonely, even my shadow decided to flee
I cried endlessly while even my reflection laughed at me
The voices in my head don’t stop
Heaviness in my heart won’t let me breathe
I’m sorry for not being the perfect friend
I’m sorry for not being your perfect boyfriend
I wander around in the blaring somber rain
Drenched in sorrow, I decay awaiting for your reply
The sands of time pities none
This may just be our last goodbye
I know you’all hate me and wished I was lost at sea
But today I hold my hands in hope
And perhaps someday you all would forgive me.
Part I – Restless Memoirs Of The Vitriol Symphony
Part II – Restless Memoirs Of The Vitriol Symphony – II
Part IV – Melody Of The Divine Silence
July 14, 2016 at 5:55 AM
Very well written. I just have to say that maybe you should change the part “I stood in disbelieve” into “I stood in disbelief.” It sounds kinda off if you use the word disbelief.
Other than that it’s very good. The emotions captured within this piece is just brilliant.
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July 14, 2016 at 6:55 AM
Thank you very much 😀 I will edit it
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July 14, 2016 at 7:02 AM
No need to thank me, I’m not an expert of the english language. Personally, I didn’t mind that you used the word disbelieve. However, I didn’t want people to easily disregard your amazing poem just because it sounds a bit off. I’ve personally experienced people shunning my work just because they were too sensitive about grammar usages, subject verb agreement, etc. People sometimes forget the whole message of a poem altogether just because it’s grammatically incorrect.
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July 14, 2016 at 7:04 AM
Sorry for the rant though, I got a little carried away haha. I just don’t want people to focus too much about the technicalities and they should just simply focus on the meaning.
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July 14, 2016 at 9:00 AM
No it’s completely fine. I am open to criticism as it helps me improve myself. And you indeed pointed out something important. It does look and sound a lot better now. I really appreciate it 😀 Pointing out mistakes is actually very helpful rather than letting a person carry on with the flaw in design
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July 15, 2016 at 12:06 AM
I really loved this poem. I could definitely relate to what you wrote especially right now since that is how I am feeling. I’m looking forward to reading more.
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July 15, 2016 at 4:03 AM
Thank you very much. I’m glad you liked it. Be sure to read the other 2 prequels of this trilogy 😀
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July 16, 2016 at 10:59 AM
Just finished the trilogy. Great work! I noticed that your last post is from May. I hope you return soon. \m/
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July 16, 2016 at 4:43 PM
Thank you so much 🙂 means a lot. Yes, I will soon \m/
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July 16, 2016 at 6:05 PM
You’re very welcome! \m/
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July 28, 2016 at 6:32 AM
brilliant writing! you captured the pain so perfectly yet poetically. brilliant for sure!
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August 28, 2016 at 10:31 AM
Thank you. Means a lot 🙂
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September 7, 2016 at 5:04 PM
you expressed your emotions in a very creative way. The poem is extremely meaningful and relatable to everyone facing such situation in life. Very nice work. I really really loved it. Keep up the awesome work mate. Never stop writing.
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September 7, 2016 at 5:13 PM
Thank you 😀 I will try my best to improve myself and write more profound compositions in the future.
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December 28, 2016 at 4:39 PM
awesome trilogy
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